Does this sound familiar?

Question

OK, so i wrote some lyrics last nite and i showed them to my friend and she said that the words sounded familiar, like from a song that she's heard or something.....
but i wanted to get another person's opinion. are there any changes that i need to make? is it good? bad? horrible? i don't know about the ending, i couldn't think of one, so i just left it there. and i don't have a chorus or anything. plus, it's really short. tell me what you think, and please don't hold back....
well, here goes everything:

I've been tryin' to get you off of my mind
'cuz i know we're not gonna make it this time.
You're not gonna fall in love with me
just like i've fallen in love with you. Again.

Is it really that hard for you to see
just how much you mean to me?
just how much i dream about you?
and i'm wonderin' if you dream about me, too.

When i dream, it's about our very first kiss
and the dream goes a little somethin' like this:

Holdin' hands we walk together
down the road named Our Forever.
And when i look into your beautiful eyes,
i see what i want, and i start to cry.

'Cuz i love you more than you will ever nkow
and i'm hopin' that it's gonna show,
even if you don't see
just how much you mean to me.

Answer 1

verry verry good!! i wish i could write music like that...



i would really like to here you sing it too!

Answer 2

i think its rly rly sweet, especially if u wrote it for someone, but i hate to break it to you, but posting original lyrics on the internet is not a good idea cuz someone might take em and it pass it off as theirs...but this song lets say that if a guy wrote it for me, i'd definetely fall for them...much luck!

Answer 3

It doesnt sound familiar to me. But it is a really nice song so far. You should definitely finish writing that song.

Answer 4

To be honest, it does sound familiar, but I can't place it. Very nice though. I love the lyrics.

Answer 5

Yes it does. I can remember left handed students in grade school getting the rule across their knuckles when they wrote "with the wrong hand".

Answer 6

i think it's an absolutely amazing song and ur amazing 2 bbe an u no it

Answer 7

omj i luv it!!!when i get married i want that 2 be played!!!!!and yes it dus sound a little familiar

Answer 8

I Think it Is OKAY not EXCELLENT



noonooonooo

Answer 9

cool

Answer 10

my dog isnt a pizza!

Answer 11

i think its really good