Input on my song lyrics?

Question

Hi! SO I wrote a song that is based of the story of Icarus. If you are unfamiliar, Daedalus a brilliant inventor and his son were locked away in a tower, so Daedalus built wings out of wax and feathers so they could fly away. Sadly, not heading to his father's warning, Icarus flew too close to the sun, melting the wax and plummeted to the sea below, which is named in his honor, the Icarian Sea.

The Tragedy of Daedalus

Is it hot up here or is it just me
Is something burning or is it my wax wings
Im gonna go down in a heap of flame
earning me some eternal fame

(Chorus)
cause Im flying a little too close to the sun
watch my back cause Im on the run
Im not a chicken but Im covered in feathers
my downfall is this excellent weather

made a promise that I just couldnt keep
I had faith so I took the leap
had to keep it on the down low
dont just go wherever the wind blows

well he said boy you cant fly too low or high
but it just isnt like me to comply
So when you decide to go and take flight
make sure to use the cover of night

Chorus

I plummet consumed in fire
I guess you should never try to fly a bit higher
they kept me grounded for all my life
now I make my only dive

Now Im crying away in my demise
tears disintegrate in the hot sky
You cant escape when the world has temptation
maybe it was better to just imagine

Chorus

Is it cold down here or is it just me
floating softly in the Icarian Sea

Answer 1

Liked this the first time you put it up here.



Guess you can have one of mine:



The Joke



Hello, Blondie! Hurry up and get Dagwood off the couch

You’re teaching our children they can live just like that slouch



Hey there, Mr. Wilson, where did your senses go?

All you have to do is tell that wild boy Dennis, “NO!”



I see – the picture’s so much clearer

I see – our lives in comedic mirror

All this hilarity is true

Unfortunately, the joke’s on you.



Hello, Archie Andrews, you’re a cute two-timing fool

Choose either love or money, send the loser back to school



Hi there, Cookie Monster, stuff your face just as you please

Even Big Bird cannot count your intake of calories



I see – the drawings of the truth

I see – the effects upon our youth

In the Sunday comics, a laugh is a must

Sorry to say, though, the joke’s on us.



BRIDGE Please Superman, if you can, take pity on your lesser man,

We need proof, we’re not aloof; that’s why we try to dive from the roof

Save me from reality, whatever that really happens to be

Promise me my kids won’t be all bitches like in Apartment 3-G!

(God, what a bunch of bitches!!)



Katzenjammer to Simpsons, a parallel story

Real crosses fantasy in search of short glory

Capturing the spirit, staking your claim,

Someday we’ll see if Charlie Brown is to blame



I see – our lives in printed bliss

I see – more to the tale than this

Panels of experts, chuckling through

Laugh at them now, but the joke’s on you.



Laughing Dolphin Music

1987

Answer 2

This might be the worst song I have ever heard!

I am sure you are ugly and that your mom is ugly too. Because you just crossed the limits of ugliness.

Your mom must be sad. She brought you up and you ended up with pathetic lyrics as that.

Just throw her out of the window and live you life.

Still your lyrics are baaaad. Terrible.

Return back to your kindergarden class. You need them.

Answer 3

Pretty Good! especially for what the song is about!



answer mine about music?

https://answersrip.com/question/index?qid=20111001104301AAkdjZ4

Answer 4

ehhh it has a good pattern but i dont like the lyrics alot and i dont like the name id give it a 6.5 or 7

and whats it about

Answer 5

Thats talented.



Good job.