is my song ok?

Question

(back story, essentialy i wrote it cause im sleeping with a gil who doesnt want a relationship and just wants sex but i kind of cant help wanting somthing more)



hey blue eyes
the sunday sun
beckons you to rise
and leave me alone

but i just want to lie
with you for a while
and im content to stay
in comfortable denile

but i am me
and you are you
three's a crowd
but so is two
so go on
and leave me alone

hey blue eyes
i am resigned
to jealousy
of other men
who know you well
and dont complain
that you kiss and tell

hey blue eyes
the sunday sun
beckons you to rise
and leave me alone

Answer 1

very poetic. very nice :)

Answer 2

Omg, that's pretty awesome!! But have you copyrighted your lyrics? Otherwise some one by now would have stolen it and copyrighted it as their own and most probably sold it off later for a quick buck!

Answer 3

I think it's awesome. You're a very good song writer. <<<<<3